tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9682791.post450039187250319514..comments2009-03-04T09:56:50.600-05:00okieinthecityhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04102377939595252152noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9682791.post-60239044309751010342009-03-04T09:56:00.000-05:002009-03-04T09:56:00.000-05:00Fantastic! I freaking love this!!! My fave so far... When will you be publishing a book of poems? Soon?? Do not deny the public what is aches for!! <BR/><BR/>I recccomend checking this out: http://www.citylights.com/Davidhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00209241444733649573noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9682791.post-60999000869901629772009-02-24T12:54:00.000-05:002009-02-24T12:54:00.000-05:00My favorite is the third stanza as well, i love the imagery there and throughout.Wesleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16276219431063638020noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9682791.post-86798701836232512192009-02-22T08:43:00.000-05:002009-02-22T08:43:00.000-05:00Graphically intense. (No pun intended) Sad that man has wasted such an opportunity for greatness. Thanks for bringing that to life thousands of miles away.Sundancehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18289108920239970004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9682791.post-7840176954597220552009-02-20T16:50:00.000-05:002009-02-20T16:50:00.000-05:00Very pretty. Great work. The 3rd is my favorite stanza. I also really like 4 and 5. I like what you're saying. I felt your heart.Marybethhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12566155549454003023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9682791.post-16911521322099247322009-02-20T15:00:00.000-05:002009-02-20T15:00:00.000-05:00I need to let this stew in me, and get back to you<BR/><BR/>Initial thoughts:<BR/><BR/>all of the alliteration works well and is seamless. <BR/><BR/>Tone is consistant.<BR/><BR/>The stanza with the eyes may lean toward a mixed metaphor. <BR/><BR/>Last two stanza are fantastic.Steven Leyvahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13131665082370821697noreply@blogger.com